Iya Ythmir

Wonderful. Simply wonderful. I like the entire story. Since this is the edited version, I don't have much to say. From the beginning, I was instantly sucked into Amy's little ...

First of all, I love your title. It fits the story nicely. Your descriptions are good however, they're not good enough to actually make hearts flutter in anxiety. And... well, ...

Wonderful prologue, the action is there, I can recognize it. However, it would be better if I actually felt it. A prologue is an important part of a story too, ...

I've read the book too and it is really wonderful. As I read through it, the words "sci-fi" never even crossed my mind and it almost falls into that genre. ...

Wow. What I really like about this piece is its description. I like the way you described the village, the tears in Dawn's eyes, her wings... And I especially like ...

Interesting prologue. It makes me want to read more of your works. “If you were mine, you would pay unspeakably for your deceit, Ecre.” It slapped the woman across the ...

The suspense in the story is wonderful but perhaps too rushed. I think there wasn't enough time for me to sympathize with the character, to get to know them more ...

I would also like to know what it was that Skits did and how further the internal conflict within Reign would make her move since they're very good friends after ...

As pointed out by the previous posters, the amount of dialogue is simply too much for this one. I'd like to see more of how Gavin and Samantha interact with ...

The errors I wanted to point out have already been posted so I don't have much to say here. It's good and it has a really nice flow. I like ...

An interesting read for a prologue. I like the description on the first part, although I was a bit confused about your first line. But this is fantasy, so my ...

This piece is interesting but it didn't keep me glued all the way. It needs more drive - or point, as the previous posters have said. The flow of it ...